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| == Simple sentence structure ==
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| [[Simple sentence]]s are easier to understand than complex ones. The simplest sentence structure in English is ''subject-verb-object-period'', ''subject-verb-object-period'' and so on. Try to use the simplest sentences that make sense.
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| You should begin by writing simple sentences naturally when you add something to Bharatpedia. In your mind, do not phrase your sentence obscurely and then try to convert it to something simpler. Get in the habit of thinking in clear, direct English, without unnecessary words. But never be afraid to add a few words to make a sentence clearer. Indian English is ''not'' shorter English, although it frequently has shorter sentences.
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| In many cases, Indian English ''needs'' more words than ordinary English. In part this is because of "filler words" (extra words), where the words act as a mental pause, allowing the reader to catch up with your thought. When converting something from Bharatpedia, it is not uncommon to find that your Indian English article takes up 25% to 50% more words than in standard English. In cases where the original English is poorly structured (usually in an attempt to seem smart to others), you may use much more space.
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| Remember that this guideline, like all Bharatpedia rules, is meant to be used with [[common sense]]. It is more important to follow the ''spirit'' of simple sentence structure than reduce every possible sentence to its simplest form.
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| === Guidelines ===
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| 1. Always start by using ''simple sentences''. For example:
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| *''John Smith walked his dog.''
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| :Subject: ''John Smith''
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| :Verb: ''walked''
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| :Direct object: ''his dog''
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| *''John Smith walked his dog to the supermarket.''
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| :Subject: ''John Smith''
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| :Verb: ''walked''
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| :Direct object: ''his dog''
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| :Indirect object (also prepositional phrase): ''to the supermarket''
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| but, if possible, not
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| *''John Smith walked to the supermarket with his dog.''
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| :Subject: ''John Smith''
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| :Verb: ''walked''
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| :Two indirect objects referring to the subject: ''to the supermarket'' and ''with his dog''
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| 2. Try to avoid ''compound sentences'' – those with embedded conjunctions (and, or, but, however, etc.) – when possible. Write this:
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| *Good: ''John Smith walked his dog. Later, he was tired.''
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| *Less good: ''John Smith walked his dog but later he was tired.''
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| ''But'' this is not a guideline in favor of short sentences. For example:
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| *Good: ''John Smith walked his big, hairy dog, Bluto, to the supermarket on Main Street. Later, he was so tired that he collapsed onto his bed exhausted.''
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| 3. If you must use ''complex sentences'' – those with both independent clauses (which express a complete thought) and at least one subordinate clause (starting with a word like although, because, who, which, etc.) – try to have only one subordinate clause, like this:
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| *''John Smith walked his dog to the supermarket because he was hungry.''
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| :Subject: ''John Smith''
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| :Verb: ''walked''
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| :Direct object: ''his dog''
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| :Indirect object (also prepositional phrase): ''to the supermarket''
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| :Dependent clause: ''because he was hungry''
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| For example:
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| *Bad: ''John Smith, who was very tired, walked his dog to the supermarket because he was hungry but he returned to his home still hungry and even more tired because the market was closed.''
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| *Clauses: ''who was very tired''; ''because he was hungry''; ''but he returned to his home''; ''and even more tired'' and ''because the market was closed''
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| *Better: ''John Smith was very tired. Nevertheless, he walked his dog to the supermarket because he was hungry. But the market was closed. So he returned to his home still hungry and even more tired.''
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| 4. Try not to use ''compound-complex sentences'', with multiple independent and dependent clauses.
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| *Bad: ''John Smith walked his dog to the supermarket where he thought he might buy some apples, but Mary Jones, who considered herself superior to John (although many people believed that she didn't have any reason to feel that way), arrived first and spitefully bought the remaining three apples and so John, who was mad as hell at Mary by this time, had to go home hungry anyway.''
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| *Better: ''John Smith walked his dog to the supermarket, thinking he might buy some apples. However, Mary Jones arrived first, and bought the last three. She did this just for spite. She considered herself superior to John, though many thought she had no reason to feel that way. By this time, John was mad as hell at Mary, but he had to go home hungry anyway.''<br>
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| To sum up, the preferred sentence forms are:
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| # Subject-Verb-DirectObject.
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| # Subject-Verb-IndirectObject.
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| # Subject-Verb-DirectObject-IndirectObject.
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| # Subject-Verb-DirectObject-SubordinateClause.
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| # Subject-Verb-DirectObject-IndirectObject-SubordinateClause.
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| === Rewriting existing sentences ===
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| Here are some suggestions about how to change complex sentence structures into simpler ones. They can be applied over and over again to the same sentence until you feel the sentence is simple enough for this Bharatpedia. Although listed in order of complexity, the ideas can be applied in any order.
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| ==== Suggestions ====
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| 1. When you see ''and'', ''or'', ''but'', ''for'', ''so'', ''yet'' and other [[wikt:conjunction|conjunctions]] that link two independent thoughts in the same sentence:
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| <br> 1. Remove the conjunction.
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| <br> 2. Add a period at the end of the word that preceded the conjunction.
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| <br> 3. Capitalize the first word that followed the conjunction.
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| <br> 4. You may have to add new punctuation, usually in the second sentence.
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| <br>Example: ''John Smith walked his dog but later he was tired'' becomes ''John Smith walked his dog. Later, he was tired''.
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| 2. When the subject is missing from the second thought, add the appropriate [[wikt:pronoun|pronoun]].<br>
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| Example: ''John Smith walked his dog and later petted Mary's cat'' becomes ''John Smith walked his dog. Later, he petted Mary's cat''.
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| 3. You can always split a sentence at a [[semicolon]].<br>
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| Example: ''John Smith liked to walk his dog''';''' today, however, the dog was sick'' becomes ''John Smith liked to walk his dog. Today, however, the dog was sick''.
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| 4a. When the [[conjunction]] expresses significant meaning (usually how or why the subject arrived at the current state), you might consider leaving the conjunction in place as the start of the second sentence.<br>
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| Example: ''John Smith walked his dog, but he didn't like it'' becomes ''John Smith walked his dog. But he did not like it'' (here 'but' is the conjunction that now starts the next sentence).<br>
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| 4b. You might also want to change the order of the sentences, and change the conjunction if necessary.<br>
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| Example: ''John Smith walked his dog even though he was very tired'' becomes ''John Smith was very tired. Even so, he walked his dog''.
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| 5. If you see more than one subordinate or dependent clause in a sentence, you can usually isolate all but one by:
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| <br> 1. Changing the order of the sentences so that the most important information comes first.
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| <br> 2. Starting all but the first sentence with the filler words: ''this'' or ''this is'' or ''this was due to'' and so forth.<br>
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| Example: ''John Smith walked his dog, which made him angry because the dog always cut into on-coming traffic, which, in turn, made the drivers angry at John, not the dog''. This becomes ''John Smith was angry while walking his dog. This was because the dog would always cut into on-coming traffic. This, in turn, made the drivers irritated at John, not the dog''.
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| 6. When you see a dependent clause occurring in the middle of a sentence (normally separated by commas or parentheses), you can usually detach it and make it a separate sentence, again with the appropriate pronoun.<br>
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| Example: ''John Smith, who was very tired, walked his dog...'' becomes ''John Smith was very tired. He walked his dog...''.
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| ====A real-world example====
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| Before changing, these two paragraphs were in Bharatpedia article on the [[Sun]]:
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| :[[Earth]]'s fate is still a bit of a mystery. Previous calculations show that, due to the [[solar wind]] (which drops 30% of the sun's mass), Earth could escape to a higher orbit. But a newer study shows that, due to the tidal forces, Earth would possibly vanish itself while the sun continues to get bigger, although the sun will lose mass.
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| :Anyway, Earth's ocean and air would long have worn out, even if the sun is still in its main sequence stage. After the Sun reaches a point where it can no longer get bigger, the Sun will literally explode, but not like a [[supernova]], but rather, it will expand rapidly and lose its layers, forming a [[planetary nebula]]. Eventually the sun will shrink into a [[white dwarf]], and over several hundred billion, even trillion years (100,000,000,000 to 1,000,000,000,000 years), fade to a [[black dwarf]]
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| After changing, these paragraphs looked like this:
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| :[[Earth]]'s fate is still a bit of a mystery. In the long term, the Earth's future depends on the Sun, and the Sun is going to be fairly stable for the next 5 [[billion]] years.<ref>The Sun's evolution. [http://faculty.wcas.northwestern.edu/~infocom/The%20Website/evolution.html]</ref><ref>Goldsmith D. & Owen T. 2001. ''The search for life in the universe''. University Science Books, p. 96. {{ISBN|978-1-891389-16-0}}</ref> Calculations suggest that the Earth might move to a wider orbit. This is because about 30% of the Sun's mass will blow away in the [[solar wind]]. However, in the very long term the Earth will probably be destroyed as the Sun increases in size. Stars like the Sun become [[red giant]]s at a later stage.<ref>Schröder K.-P. & Smith R.C. 2008. Distant future of the Sun and Earth revisited. ''Monthly Notices of the Royal Astronomical Society'' '''386''' (1): 155–163. [http://mnras.oxfordjournals.org/content/386/1/155]</ref> The Sun will expand beyond orbits of Mercury, Venus, and probably Earth. In any event, the Earth's ocean and air would have vanished before the Sun gets to that stage.
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| :After the Sun reaches a point where it can no longer get bigger, it will lose its layers and form a [[planetary nebula]]. Eventually, the Sun will shrink into a [[white dwarf]]. Then, over several hundred billion or even a trillion years, the Sun would fade into a [[black dwarf]].
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| These changes were ''not'' just a matter of language. It did need some subject-matter understanding. The latest version has changes in the language, and better science, with some sources.
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| == References == | | == References == |
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